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Abela Paul Bateyunga(born January 3, 1982) is a Tanzanian Social entrepreneur, youth mentor, lawyer and a media personality who is a founder and executive director of Tanzania Bora Initiative , Love arts and she codes for change Co- founder. She is a graduate of University of Dar es salaam and a mandela washington fellow 2014 -- attended Presidential Precinct on Civic engagement in summer 2014. Abella Bateyunga has worked with international non-profit organizations like United Nations High Commissioner for Refugees (UNHCR) and Water Aid .She is also worked as governance officer at British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC)-Media Action Tanzania Abella is a media personality, public and motivational speaker. She has led and mentored a number of young Tanzanians in various leadership and career successful path like the likes of Ismail Biro, Lydia Charles, Nickson George, Ceaser Daniel, Mujuni Baitani, Angela Francis, Najma Juma, Hassan Pukey . this is to mention but few , amongst the many youth she works with and continues to mentors.

Family and Education

Early life Abella is the third of the seven children born to Paul (deceased) and Alfredina Bateyunga. She was born in Mtwara- Tanzania.

Education Abella attained her education at a number of schools, Lyalamo Primary School in Iringa, Azimio Primary School in Mbeya , for her primary education. For secondary education she went to Mbeya Sangu Secondary School and St.Mary’s High School . She finally graduate with a bachelors in law at the University of Dar Es Salaam .

Career Abella started her career as a project officer at Twaweza in 2011 while also working as a producer and presenter at clouds FM - Maanisha limited.She then joined Water aid as head of research and Policy and advocacy.In 2013 she joined BBC Media action in Governance.

She has since left BBC and founded three organizations which reflects the her passion in governance, arts and girls empowerment, Tanzania Bora Initiative (TBI), She Codes for Change (SCC) and LoveArts company.

Tanzania Bora Initiative are collaborative efforts of Tanzanian individuals who share common objectives of development in social, political and economic aspects. The initiative is inspired and driven by the zeal of seeing an engaged, accountable, and responsible society, where every citizen has responsibility and a role to play in bringing about sustainable development, as well as emphasizing accountability by leaders at all levels.

SHE Codes for Change aims to transform Information Technology educational opportunities for girls in secondary schools ages 13-19 through its training and mentorship programs and young women in Colleges and Universities ages 20-26.

LOVE ARTS mainly seeks to create art that evokes a need for positive change. Arts is like a wild child or a crazy fire, it is impossible to predict, but if harnessed properly can birth an inspiring movement, inform the world, influence people and transform lives.

As a media person, Abela has produced and presented a number of programs including TV - Nafsi TV Show Radio - Temino Radio Show Mrembo - Sauti Moja , +255 Kwanza and Ndoto Kubwa

Community engagement projects: Abella works on various community engagements projects that she initiates through her founded organization. The projects spuns from civic engagements and youth empowerment as well as innovation.

Data Zetu project that aims to empower communities to make better, more evidence-based decisions to improve their lives. Jua Katiba , an awareness campaign about the Tanzanian Constitution. Kijana Wajibika (Youth be responsible) is a groundbreaking initiative that builds a movement of youth and women who are well informed on civic rights and actively engaged in political process. Mawazo Challenge project where youth are engaged in discovering and supporting innovation for positive impact and assist them to move their social enterprises from concept to prototype. Balozi wa Amani , a youth centered movement advocating for peaceful engagements in community matters and elections. Serikali Yangu , (My government) - project a movement that encourages youth to express their preferences in and priorities in government. BoreshaHabari project aimed at integrating and empowering women and young people to broadcast their voice through media to enhance accountability and transparency in society. Thamani Ya Binti project aims to capacitate young girls’ with necessary skills to advocate for change, also to increase their awareness and solutions of the challenges they face in the society.